Mentor Sentence Monday: Nicola Davies

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I love the way Nicola Davies combines beautiful description with informative facts in her book Bat Loves the Night. Her sentences are great for showing kids how to use commas in compound and complex sentences. Davies also uses great verbs.
The following are sentences from Bat Loves the Night:

Bat shouts as she flies, louder than a hammer blow, higher than a squeak. She beams her voice around her like a flashlight, and the echoes come singing back.

The following sentences were generated using Davies' words as my model:

Cat wails as he wonders, louder than a baby, deeper than screech. He vibrates his voice like a bad opera singer, and the other cats join in.